My trembling fingers slip into your frozen palm,
Our eyes meet;mine searching,
Yours looking at me- lifeless.
| Picture credit: Christophe Vanfleteren |
Monday, March 7
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An interior monologue, a performance, a confession and a song,some words for my best audience - ME.
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first of all, the picture is haunting.
secondly, your last word took my breath away.
powerful
God!!!
Amazing... And yes I agree the pic is truly spooky!!
thats touching.
brrr.. thats scary, Amropali.. a very powerful haiku!
welcome to Haiku Heights :) your tercet isn't technically a haiku.. a haiku has 17 syllables in total :) syllable=pronunciation sounds. eg: Amropali would have 4 syllables, since it is voiced as Am-ro-pa-li. Hope to see you try out. Your effort here in three lines has lot of potential :)
painful
but nice capture
Mastttt :) wonder how ppl manage to say so much in just countable words :-S
creepy. not the sort of poetry i would wanna read before bedtime :\
does that technically count as a haiku btw? isn't it supposed to ne 5-7-5 syllables per line?
still, creepy. :|
Really painful!!
Its my first visit to your blog (from BJ). I love the layout and feel of your blog.
Good Job!
Gr8 thoughts...
Im falling more and more in love with Haiku!
Fantastic, and haunting piece!
This is great! May not be a haiku, but what the hell, it's haunting!!
Pinching
You look even better in new snap
powerful
that's the most powerful and hard-hitting and chilling three lines I've ever come across!!!
lovely..
Short n sweet :)
Short n sweet :)
powerful
This is great! May not be a haiku, but what the hell, it's haunting!!
Gr8 thoughts...
creepy. not the sort of poetry i would wanna read before bedtime :\
does that technically count as a haiku btw? isn't it supposed to ne 5-7-5 syllables per line?
still, creepy. :|
brrr.. thats scary, Amropali.. a very powerful haiku!
welcome to Haiku Heights :) your tercet isn't technically a haiku.. a haiku has 17 syllables in total :) syllable=pronunciation sounds. eg: Amropali would have 4 syllables, since it is voiced as Am-ro-pa-li. Hope to see you try out. Your effort here in three lines has lot of potential :)
powerful
Mastttt :) wonder how ppl manage to say so much in just countable words :-S
I know. As it was my first attempt at a Haiku, I googled and saw that English haikus aren't as strict with the syllable count. So.. u know took my liberties. :)
Thanx for the encouragement.
I know. As it was my first attempt at a Haiku, I googled and saw that English haikus aren't as strict with the syllable count. So.. u know took my liberties
p.s: I love creepy.
I know!! Me too.
Can't wait to try my hands at it again!
I am honoured.
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