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Away from the madness and the past.
You find a new job and with it, independence.
First day at work, your eyes spot him in the crowd.
He is incredibly handsome;
Incredibly out of your league.
But for some strange reason he spots you too.
And he'd like to fuck you!
He steals you away from the loaded work-table,
And takes you to an unmade, well-slept in bed.
Your head screams out all the things you saw in the mirror each day-
hideous, unattractive, rejected and always unwanted.
Before you question him-
'why do you want me?'
-He pretends that your curves are delectable
and your scars sexy.
His voice sounds like soft silken touch
as he moans your name gently into your ears.
And you ...
You shut out your screaming head,
Close your eyes tight,
And pretend he didn't talk to other girls like that.
shared with poetry potluck. and Thursday Poets' Rally#42.
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In the end you count your change and ask yourself was riding the bus worth the money.
WOW!!! your poem just blew my mind. AMAZING!
and sometimes, there is no answer.
Thanx S,
I am glad you liked it!!
Nice !!
wow, awesome stuff. The subtext was great, very well crafted! :)
Wow! the next time you call me a poet and a natural, I will take a certificate from you. You blow my mind. You inspire me to write. I am proud, of you. :) Awesome this is.
wow!!! That is immense, coming from you!!!
seriously!!!
<3 ya!!
Thanx!!
straight up and hard, Amropali! I think thats Neeraja coming before my comment? She just said it all :)
My Potluck Post. It's Random This Time.
powerful highlight of relationship issues.
bless you.
A++
indeed a great post to read.. :) awesome
fantastic write! masked harsh truth will gonna hurt :)
hmmm... hmmmm... hmmmmmm..... what can i say? sensuous, sultry, madness! no wonder some woman hated men.. my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/22/springtide/
that was a hard hitting one! seriously! bold and poignant! d sharpness definitely affects the reader at some level in here...well done!
thanx Sarah.
was reading some article that day and something hit me..
this is the result.
This is incredible. write on!
Luna
truly awesome.. the fluidity of intimacy sparkled here..:) keep on writing..
Bold ,harsh simple powerful write...............
So much for long engagements :) I just hope it didn't leave more, emotional, scars!
The flow is so easy, so well-written. The meaning, so not! Good work.
something and all.. to which you know how i feel.. amazingly put
Dang! Raw and powerful. Few can get away with writing with such grit - But you, you have pulled it off with an outstanding effectiveness. Great job!
honest and cool,
happy rally.
Sometimes, the ride is worth it, if only for the experience. It's all about perspective. Hey, if that one night made you feel like you were the most beautiful and desirable creature on the planet, then it served its purpose.
Love this! You deserve the Hot Award!
Thank you so much. :)
Animal attraction in this. Hope you enjoyed the ride. Some people are turned on by scars you know ,)
This is fiction. I hope my protagonist enjoyed it too! =p
P.s: some scars are sexy!
You've told it like it is, the things we think and do but don't want to recognize or admit to. Kudos!
So heartwrenching. Powerful words.
Raw and sad, interesting write - thanks
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