Thursday, November 18

Unfolded

It was a  ritual. The first thing she would do on waking up was to check her phone for his absent texts/calls.  She had waited- ignored, unanswered, humiliated. At an uneventful moment ,she realized to her surprise,that the day had finally come when his name no longer brought a smile on her face.

16 comments:

Neeraja said...

hmmm...it cud be a painful surprise, but at the end u jus knw tht this is the ryt thing, that this had to hpn. vth this, u cud discover urself, once again.

Amropali said...

yes.Brilliant revelation to start the day with.

wanderer said...

brilliant take...I just wish men could have been a little more...

Rek said...

The grey skies change hues as the sun cometh out...moving on is painful but fruitful...well written... ;)

P@ul@mi said...

thank you. for developing your one thought into a story :)

P@ul@mi said...

and congrats for your first 55 fiction post :)

Amropali said...

^ it was ur encouragement.

Ana_treek said...

u know wat, m sailing in a similar boat, waiting for that day to come!

Nalini Hebbar said...

The brain is a smart piece of machinery!...it has a way to cope with pain...Loved the post and the realization.

A Restless Mind With A Sensitive Heart! said...

That was brilliant! I had to read it twice to understand it, but worth it!

But, does that really happen? The anger also has a delight hidden somewhere... what say u?!

RESTLESS

Amropali said...

@ Restless-> I agree. The tragedy here is that with the smile, the anger also seems to have vanished.

*Soumyo* said...

Quite good. Liked it.

Viyoma said...

Hard hitting!! Just 55 words, yet they created an impact.

Amropali said...

Quite good. Liked it.

Amropali said...

and congrats for your first 55 fiction post :)

Amropali said...

The brain is a smart piece of machinery!...it has a way to cope with pain...Loved the post and the realization.