tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post3496921513108569981..comments2023-05-21T20:53:20.071+05:30Comments on Two people: Absence of a fatherAmropalihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09639390876321920913noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-36138233583992035352011-03-09T17:58:55.933+05:302011-03-09T17:58:55.933+05:30Good one. I like the way you presented the '3G...Good one. I like the way you presented the '3G' effect.Amropalihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09639390876321920913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-86517868548749417772011-03-09T17:58:55.560+05:302011-03-09T17:58:55.560+05:30@ Arun-> thanx@thoughtful---> thank u. I am ...@ Arun-> thanx<br>@thoughtful---> thank u. I am glad someone got the pun!<br><br>and about that typo.. i noticed but life intervened and din't get time to see how to fix it.will see to it.Amropalihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09639390876321920913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-44545623649283076202011-03-09T17:58:55.200+05:302011-03-09T17:58:55.200+05:30I love the richness of content and expression used...I love the richness of content and expression used in your post.Great post and all the best for the contest.Amropalihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09639390876321920913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-9892990337594204252010-11-11T11:55:06.792+05:302010-11-11T11:55:06.792+05:30I love the richness of content and expression used...I love the richness of content and expression used in your post.Great post and all the best for the contest.Dr. Pratibha Singhhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16551548865707335224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-87494453488576279912010-11-09T21:46:05.143+05:302010-11-09T21:46:05.143+05:30@ Malvika--> thanx for taking the time out for ...@ Malvika--> thanx for taking the time out for the feedback. I really appreciate it.<br />I did write it in a hurry(You know how it is- late night munchies, lack of enthusiasm for the work at hand, something telling me I-have-a-class-9-its-high-time-I-sleep and bam! comes a blogpost).<br />well, apart from the obvious overlook of traditional English, there are things that I actually intended be the way they are. the it is generally the way a new born is addressed as coz the whole gender politics doesn't apply as yet(I would not like to get into it right now).<br />I confess i have a thing for cliches/classics. Hence the last line.<br /><br />Hoping to read many more of ur critiques in the future..<br /><br />p.s: the last word of ur comment... I believe u meant critic<br /><br /><br />Best.Amropalihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09639390876321920913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-29784638852309197692010-11-09T21:13:44.616+05:302010-11-09T21:13:44.616+05:30I loved the way you built it up, the narration is ...I loved the way you built it up, the narration is so good that I could feel the significance of the last few moments to the person's life. The last line was short, sufficient and just right! Cliche line but didn't sound that way here at all.<br /><br />But to begin with the post seems to be written in a hurry, you could refine it a lot, in places like 'moments like these' (not this, it sounds Indian English), 'attached to' could be associated (or any other word that gives a lesser action), 'sense of pride made available' is too long a sentence with unnecessary words, 'rejoicing the news' (not at the news).<br />Could be only to me, but have you chosen 'it' for the child on purpose instead of he, it sounds like addressing a fetous not a child with the frequent use of 'it'. <br />Last para has 2 lines in the middle that have a abrupt deviation in tense.<br /><br />But yeah, I hope I am not being an unwelcome critique.Malvikahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12261891671768272272noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-64268101721748765512010-11-08T20:45:57.179+05:302010-11-08T20:45:57.179+05:30@ Vikram-- thanx for the encouragement.
happy read...@ Vikram-- thanx for the encouragement.<br />happy reading. happy blogging.<br /><br />Best.Amropalihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09639390876321920913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-22735915275089182912010-11-08T14:32:42.551+05:302010-11-08T14:32:42.551+05:30Hi Amropali,
Lovely poignant story.
Keep Writing s...Hi Amropali,<br />Lovely poignant story.<br />Keep Writing such wonderful stuff.<br />Regards<br />VikramVikram Waman Karvehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00290102473130246523noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-69446922540632608982010-11-07T13:07:17.887+05:302010-11-07T13:07:17.887+05:30WOW is less for this. Touched my depths and though...WOW is less for this. Touched my depths and thought proviking.gauravhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09973560030669713495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-24044682159771676002010-11-07T00:38:26.539+05:302010-11-07T00:38:26.539+05:30Very well written Amropali, especially the 3G effe...Very well written Amropali, especially the 3G effect on an armyman's life.Sumanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09942414358735746913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-45001982112693299032010-11-01T21:39:51.288+05:302010-11-01T21:39:51.288+05:30LOL!!
din realise that I wasn't.
Now that u me...LOL!!<br />din realise that I wasn't.<br />Now that u mention it...<br /><br />btw, brilliant publicity. Flattery does work, especially with women. :pAmropalihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09639390876321920913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-24314586565481430842010-11-01T21:24:21.379+05:302010-11-01T21:24:21.379+05:30Yes, loved the 3G reference! Nice write.And by the...Yes, loved the 3G reference! Nice write.And by the way, follow me already.Not fair :DProcrastinatorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02842579763300119618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-20759788983613214892010-11-01T18:07:14.357+05:302010-11-01T18:07:14.357+05:30awesome awesome awesome..!!!
My god! too too too ...awesome awesome awesome..!!!<br /><br />My god! too too too good..<br />keep writing..<br />love you friendRahul Jainhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18383601047166957653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-52615458495584502092010-10-30T22:16:51.255+05:302010-10-30T22:16:51.255+05:30@ Arun-> thanx
@thoughtful---> thank u. I am...@ Arun-> thanx<br />@thoughtful---> thank u. I am glad someone got the pun!<br /><br />and about that typo.. i noticed but life intervened and din't get time to see how to fix it.will see to it.Amropalihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09639390876321920913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-62693536527300534362010-10-30T13:41:16.977+05:302010-10-30T13:41:16.977+05:30Hey I liked it.. Very well written..
The pun on th...Hey I liked it.. Very well written..<br />The pun on the 3G, amazing..<br /><br />Just to bring it to your notice, you have made a typo on Indivine. It reads as "bsence of a father"Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8915500641408192583.post-32553168846079718512010-10-29T18:43:07.795+05:302010-10-29T18:43:07.795+05:30Good one. I like the way you presented the '3G...Good one. I like the way you presented the '3G' effect.Arunhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05204071602832608412noreply@blogger.com